As the title suggest, I wonder if anyone is willing to read a fanfic called Chronicles of Heroes. A Valkryia Chronicles/Company of Heroes 2 crossover. I'm just curious if there are people who want to read.
https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11730269/1/Chronicles-of-Heroes
It's for anybody who just wants to have a look at some fan stuff.
Anybody interested in reading one of my fanfics?
9 Mar 2016, 02:25 AM
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24 Mar 2016, 12:17 PM
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Read a bit of it a few pointers:
The good: You can paint a picture with words a skill not all have.
The structure of your sentences are overall well executed.
Not so good:
Reduce the amount of characters that we follow. It gets very hard to keep up when you are switching every third paragraph between an entirely different perspective.
Do not mix realism with fantasy, do not make xovers. I'm sorry but no. It might make sense in your head but it will not make sense to others.
Honestly just a story of the American paratroopers getting in with the Soviets is quite an interesting bit, but when its mixed with the Valkyria Chronicles you loose anyone not familiar with both "lores".
Read up on Joseph Beyrle and on Aleksandra Samusenko
He was an american paratroopers that was captured by the Germans, escaped a POW camp and ran into the First Guards Tank Army. Specifically he fought with Aleksandra Samusenko's battalion, supposedly the only female tank battalion commander of the war.
You can probably build a very good story from that.
The good: You can paint a picture with words a skill not all have.
The structure of your sentences are overall well executed.
Not so good:
Reduce the amount of characters that we follow. It gets very hard to keep up when you are switching every third paragraph between an entirely different perspective.
Do not mix realism with fantasy, do not make xovers. I'm sorry but no. It might make sense in your head but it will not make sense to others.
Honestly just a story of the American paratroopers getting in with the Soviets is quite an interesting bit, but when its mixed with the Valkyria Chronicles you loose anyone not familiar with both "lores".
Read up on Joseph Beyrle and on Aleksandra Samusenko
He was an american paratroopers that was captured by the Germans, escaped a POW camp and ran into the First Guards Tank Army. Specifically he fought with Aleksandra Samusenko's battalion, supposedly the only female tank battalion commander of the war.
You can probably build a very good story from that.
Disclaimer: Posts made while drunk should not count against this poster.
26 Mar 2016, 13:57 PM
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Posts: 455
Finally, someone replied!
Thanks for a few pointers. Its been awhile since I have had some critics.
As for the crossover preference, I can understand some of it.I just happened to be so used to doing crossovers for a very long time that I just stick with it.
Thanks for a few pointers. Its been awhile since I have had some critics.
As for the crossover preference, I can understand some of it.I just happened to be so used to doing crossovers for a very long time that I just stick with it.
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